Stacey's essay=) --> marks by Shrida

I was hoping to write about my bittersweet memories in primary school but since the last year is much fresher in my mind I shall just write about that…
Once, there was a Healthy Lifestyle week, where my class won first prize for both categories: skipping and eating fruits, my whole class were elated! Although the prizes were lame (small cereal boxes and little sticky notes), our prize was the glory and pride we received.
In June, we had our p6 camp in school. It was one of the best camps I have ever been to. On the first day, after the motivational speeches to prep us for PSLE, we went for a walk near McRitchie Reserve. My group even witnessed a monkey snatch a snack from my friend’s hand! Then at night, we fell asleep after the movie screening of “Night at the Museum 2”. And on the next day, we played many fun games in school before proceeding to do Dragon Boating. WE HAD THE TIME OF OUR LIVES. Although it was scary at first since it was everybody’s first time, in the company of each other, we soon tossed aside our fears and began to have fun. We raced with other classes, sang our hearts out and didn’t care although we got splashed. 
I remembered after our PSLE, we were really relieved and excited since all our stress had melted away and we could focus on relaxing and playing. We brought Uno cards, board games, poker cards and the boys brought Duel Master cards. We also had to attend a lesson to learn how to hip-hop. It was actually quite fun although I suck at dancing. I dance like I have two left feet. :P The school also organized for us a digital photo-album course for us. So for the remaining weeks in school, we were supposed to take photos. When we went on a class fieldtrip to the Singapore Discovery centre, we had tons of fun on the bus trip as well as during the excursion itself…
Then time quickly flew and before I knew it, it was already the graduation night. On the night, I only wore a simple blouse and jeans thinking that everyone wouldn’t actually dress up that much even though our theme was “Starstruck”. But I felt ridiculously underdressed compared to the other girls wearing dresses/skirts. Even some of the guys in my class had even made the effort to wear button-down shirts with jeans. However, I had an amazing time at the party.
We had a lucky draw where our collected entry tickets would be drawn from a box; a Gongshang Idol where our fellow students put up outstanding performances that blew us, the audience, away; a section where 3 selected students of each gender who were the best dressed were forced to do a catwalk on stage and Ms/Mr. Gongshang would be crowned according to the volume of the audience’s cheers for each person! The highlight of the night was when the teachers of the p6 level danced to the Black Eyed Peas’ “I Gotta’ Feeling”. It was AWESOME. You should have heard the cheers.  On that night, we had a delicious spread for our buffet dinner.
The funniest event of the night? It was when we had to stand up and shake our bodies and wag our fingers along to the song “Nobody” by the Wonder Girls that would be played randomly anytime during the night.
I love Gongshang and my class! I will never ever forget them! They will forever be in my heart!
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